empathy

It is much more interesting to actually recreate an incident for readers than to simply tell about it.

-          In my narrative I try to put the reader in my shoes and let them be in the incident.

 relates events in sequence. The creation of specific scenes set at actual times and in actual places. Show, don't tell. Re-create an event by setting it in a specific time and space.

-          I think I do that… if not ill learn to

 includes detailed observations of people, places, and events.

-          Yes I try to go into detail so the reader knows exactly where  they are and whats going on

Do you recall sights, sounds, smells, tactile feelings, and tastes? Use actual or re-created dialogue? Give actual names of people and places.

-          Yes, I did.

 presents important changes, contrasts, or conflicts and creates tension.

-          There is a pretty tense part in my story… no conflicts though

Do you grow from change? Is there a conflict between characters? Is there a contrast between the past and the present?

-          There was no conflict in my story only because it was an experience and it went very well

 is told from a point of view--usually the author's point of view.

-          Yes, my point of view and my thoughts

 focuses on connection between past events, people, or places and the present. How relevant is the event today? How relevant will it be in your future?

-          This narrative will be relevant throughout the rest of my life.  It changed the way I see things and now I have much more appreciation for everything

 makes a point, communicates a main idea or dominant impression.

-          yep

Your details, specific scenes, accounts of changes or conflicts, and connections between past and present should point to a single main idea or dominant impression for your paper as a whole. While not stating a flat "moral" of the story, the importance of your memory must be clear to your reader.

-          I think it was pretty clear and obvious.

·         Look back through your narrative: answer on your blog the questions or statements of each bullet point as it relates to your own narrative.  After reading the piece on EMPATHY, think about some ways that you can change your narrative.  We will be revising tomorrow along with peer editing!